Temptation
Like a madness it called in the inky black night
Casting shadows of doubt in the innocent light
It tempted Pandora, inviting her in
With the lure and desire of corruption and sin
With the lure and desire of corruption and sin
But Pandora was strong and resisted its hold
She knew much of its evil the stories foretold
Digging deep in her soul she would fight it they say
Digging deep in her soul she would fight it they say
As it wrenched at her heart when she pushed it away
So beware the red box and its secret within
With it’s pretty gold edges and velvet blood skin
Super, I am always just a tad envious of anyone who can write poetry like this. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAhh thanks Anna
DeleteI must admit, that one nearly stumped me :-)
"pretty gold edges and velvet blood skin"...you painted quite a picture with those words. Nice poem!
ReplyDeleteMmm bit grim I know, not sure what came over me, I think I was trying to get across a sinister feeling :-)
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Reckon you did, Andrea. This is brilliant. Inspirational in that, here, she tried so hard to resist, knowing the consequences. But tragic in that we all know that she ultimately failed. Really good. And your last weeks xbox poem too, with the same rhythm ;D
ReplyDeleteGreat take on the prompt Andrea! Very sinister and broody :D
ReplyDeletethis is wonderfully rich and begs to be read slowly and carefully. Thoroughly enjoyed this!
ReplyDeleteThe meter on this was expertly consistent. Enjoyed this, worth reading a few times over.
ReplyDeleteWow I can't believe all the kind comments I've had this week, thank you all so much :-)
ReplyDeleteooh very sinister. Great take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteVery clever, beautifully balanced and with a great rhythm to the sentence structure. Enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteCreepy and wonderful and lyrical, I really loved this.
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