Ok, so the answer to being late with #33 is to be insanely early with #34 and hope all the buttons I press get this published in the right place at the right time.
…but I turned it off….
It grew like a spark, just a glimmer of light
Exciting and hot as it burned through the night
It was wrong but it gave an electrical high
So I never looked back, and I never asked why
And the feeling was good, its powerful embrace
Reached deep in my heart to its loneliest place
And the power reserves I had stored up inside
Slowly drained with the anger, the pain and the pride
My addiction to X-Box was causing such pain
..but I turned it off and now I've freedom again!!
© Andrea Payne 2011
Hello & welcome to the silliness that is 100WCGU! I really love this. It has such a great rhthm to it & fits the prompt brilliantly. So glad you came back. I'll go & comment on last week's as I can see it there!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the warm welcome and lovely comments
DeleteI love this! I stopped playing games on my laptop as they sucked up hours. Well done for such an original take.
ReplyDeleteVery nice! I laughed out loud at the ending! :D
ReplyDeleteHope to see more 100-word challenge responses from you, moving forward!
Super piece- great rhythm to it. There's a lot of skill in writing a poem that scans as well (and rhymes and makes sense!!) I can rarely get all three in.
ReplyDeleteGood job
Thanks Anna, that's very kind :-)
DeleteI look forward to seeing a few verses from you in future then xx
I think a lot of young people (and even older) can relate to this. I enjoyed the flow of words, really well done, with a fun ending.
ReplyDeleteA great poem, the rhyming and meter doesn't sound forced at all. And so topical! Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you ALL so much for your lovely comments :-)
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